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Lily's avatar

this was indeed bone-crushingly sad! devastating poem written perfectly. ♥️

taylor jean's avatar

i tried to warn y’all 😭 but i appreciate that you liked it. it’s something i’ve wrestled with writing for a long time.

Imagination Unbound's avatar

holy shit this is great!!

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thank you! :)

Jeanne Vessantra's avatar

We both carry something heavy that doesn’t quite have words. That tension between wanting to be held and wanting to disappear into it. I related to this. Thank you for sharing.

taylor jean's avatar

i am both glad and sad that this piece resonated with you. there are things in life that are difficult to carry with us and it feels better to know we’re not alone. thank you for reading 🤍

T.F. Burke watcher of tv's avatar

Great writing! Wow!😢👏👏

Jeffrey Deckers's avatar

Oh wow. This is extremely well done. The darkness is tangible, and the descriptions are extremely tactile. And especially the constant of both the feel and visceral wording throughout the piece feels like craftsmanship.

AËLA's avatar

She memorized the sound

of bone meeting wood.

And still asked

for her hair to be braided.

That is not weakness.

That is what it means

to love someone

who was supposed to be safe

and wasn't.

The love and the wound

arrived in the same hands.

— AËLA

The Chameleon's Corner's avatar

My goodness. It's been a bit since something moved me in the way that this did.

Thank you for sharing this with the world 💫

taylor jean's avatar

i’m so glad this piece moved you 🤍 thank you so much for reading!

Poet_dave's avatar

Oh my!

Salt & Pomegranate's avatar

Gods this was devastating and so intimate I appreciate the way you created it from a child’s POV that’s not always the easiest to do and yet you did it exceptionally well it’s a gorgeous yet visceral piece 🖤

taylor jean's avatar

thank you so much for reading. it was definitely a difficult piece to write. it’s a vivid memory for me, even now, but it was hard to translate it into words. i’m glad you enjoyed it 🤍

Salt & Pomegranate's avatar

The fact that it’s so personal to you as well makes it that much more powerful. It was an honour to read it 🖤

Ethereal Twilight Poetry's avatar

Gut wrenching and beautiful

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thank you 🤍

𝚋𝚞𝚜 𝚜𝚝𝚘𝚙 𝚐𝚒𝚛𝚕's avatar

absolutely crushing. I feel your pain here Crim.

taylor jean's avatar

i am not crim but i’m glad you enjoyed this one 🤣

𝚋𝚞𝚜 𝚜𝚝𝚘𝚙 𝚐𝚒𝚛𝚕's avatar

This is so strange it came up under crim’s name earlier but now it’s sorted it’s self out must have been my wifi🤣 it was an incredible piece really

Mark Crutchfield's avatar

Wow Taylor. Sad, devastating, but with introspection and compassion. A tough read but stunning piece of writing.

Thank you for sharing what I imagine would have proven hard to write.

taylor jean's avatar

thank you so much for reading 🤍 it was a hard piece to write but i feel like i was letting the things i couldn’t write get in the way of the things i wanted to write.

Chi Emmanuel's avatar

Deeply reflective and devastating.

“when the left side of my skull

made hard contact

with that solid oak doorframe.

a bite into a ripe apple —

loud, wet crunch.”

😔

taylor jean's avatar

thank you for reading 🤍 it’s a piece i carry close to me

Olly von's avatar

I still wasn’t prepared, my god. Your writing has sucked the air from my lungs

taylor jean's avatar

i knew it was going to be a doozy when i first started drafting it 😅it was hard to write and even harder to convince myself to post. i’m glad you liked it 🤍

Giles's avatar

Daaaammmmnnn... you're really good.

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taylor jean's avatar

thank you so much